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PostPosted: Nov 23, 2007 1:26 pm Reply with quote Back to top

I had origanly wrote this for a fan fic contest on my own site but people seemed to like it so I started posting it around and yeah so I thought I would share it with u....Alot of my writing is NC-17 Rolling Eyes lol so idk how this forum feels about that but this is just a nice funny story so...





It was a quiet day at CTU. Jack sat in his office. The AC had broke down the day before, now sweat dripped down from his brow, making his shirt stick to him. Everyone had left, it was 4th of July, everyone went to parties, he was not invited to any. He didn't care though, he figured that he could come in a get some work done.

Chloe walked into CTU. Instantly met with heat that almost made her want to run back out to her car. She had left a fruit bowl for Ryan's party in the break room and forgot to take it home yesterday. As she was walking she noticed a light on in Jack's office, so she turned and made her way up the stairs to his office.

It was a tap on the door that startled Jack from his thoughts, and he was shocked when he looked up and saw Chloe standing there. He waved her in and she opened the door, a scowl forming on her lips.

"How could you sit in here, its so hot?"

"I need to get some work done, what are you doing here, were you invited to Ryan's party?"

Her heart stopped, he was never supposed to find out about that. Chappelle hadn't invited Jack since the last 4th of July party when he nearly killed everyone when with a firework.

"I'm so sorry Jack, you were never supposed to find out about that."

"I heard Tony talking about it, its not a big deal really."

"Oh Jack, you cant sit up here, its 4th of July."

"I dont mind, really."

She sighed and walked over to him, noticing his computer was off.

"I thought you were doing work?"

"I was, just took a break."

She nodded.

"Well I just came to get the fruit bowl I left here, I should get going."

"Is it a good time over there?"

She felt bad, it always hurt when you didn't get invited somewhere.

"Not really, you know Chappelle, all work, no play."

Jack smiled and chuckled.

"Yeah, thanks Chloe, have a good time."

She nodded and left, hurrying down the stairs, grabbing her cell phone on the way.

Tony was helping Ryan set up for the party. It was starting in 30 minutes and most of the people were here already. He jumped when his phone rang.

"Hello?"

"Tony its Chloe."

"Hi Chloe, are you still coming."

"Yeah, I just had to run to CTU first, Jacks here, he found out about the party."

"uh, I feel bad."

"Me too, hey, put Chappelle on."

He handed the phone to Ryan who was helping him put on a table cloth.

"Yeah Chloe?"

"Why cant Jack come?"

"He nearly killed us, he light a firework on the grass, I told you already."

"I wont let him light any then, come on Ryan have a heart."

Ryan sighed.

"Okay Chloe, tell Bauer to be careful this time."

"Thanks Ryan!"

She hung up and ran back up the stairs, not even bothering to knock this time. She grabbed Jack hand.

"Come on Jack, Chappelle changed his mind, I guess he really does have a heart."

"No Chloe, I have..."

"No Jack, work will still be here tomorrow, your off today and you are coming with me to the party."

He knew better then to mess with her, when she said something she meant it.

"I will drag you to the car if you dont walk."

He sighed and got up and fallowed her to the break room. She came out with a big bowl before he could even walk in, nearly hitting him in the face with the door.

"Sorry, come on."

"Whats the big hurry Chloe?"

"The party is going to start soon."

"So what if we are a little late."

She stopped and looked at him.

"I am never late, and I am driving so speed it up."

They got out to her car and she had already started the engine by the time he got in. She handed him the bowl and he looked down at it.

"You can try some, its only fruit, but it has your favorite."

"Blueberries?"

"Yep"

She pulled out of the parking lot and sped down the road.

"Chill out Chloe, if we get pulled over then it is going to take longer."

"Chappelle only lives up the road, we will be there in a minute."

Jack lifted the cover on the bowl, peeking in. He stuck his finger in a took out a Blueberry, careful not to touch anything else. He popped it in his mouth and was shocked that they were already pulling into the driveway.

"Chloe you speed demon."

"Yep, that's my wild side."

He smiled, he was glad that he got to go to a party after all, he always loved fireworks.

They both got out of the car and Jack carried the fruit bowl over to Ryan.

"Hi Ryan..."

"Hi Jack, look I..."

"Don't worry about it, but thank you for letting me come."

He nodded and took the fruit bowl from him.

Tony saw Jack and walked over.

"Hey buddy, happy 4th."

"Thanks Tony, need any help?"

"I could use your help, Ryan has got a bunch of food in the house."

Jack nodded and fallowed Tony into the house. After 8 trips, they were almost done, Jack carried the Chicken and Tony got the Hamburgers and -dogs. They decided that they would each take turns BBQing. All the guests were there and it was a little after 4:00pm, party time.

There were a little over 100 people there, and Tony and Jack had to fill the BBQ 9 times before they had enough cooked to feed everyone there.

Jack and Tony took a beer and grabbed some chicken and went to sit in the lawn chairs by the street.

"So dude, heard you were working."

"Yeah, I had some stuff to finish."

"Good thing Chloe found you, come on Jack, you know you wanted to go to a party, it sucks being left out."

"Yeah..."

"I dont blame you, hey but your here now."

Tony raised his beer.

"Happy 4th Of July Jack."

Jack smiled and raised his beer.

"You too."

They drank and ate. The party was going well, everyone seemed to be having a great time. Jack and Tony saw some of Chappelle's neighbor's. Two really hot girls, and in no time, the four of them were sitting in the pool.

Jack looked up and saw Chase, Kim, and Angelina walking towards them. Angelina had gotten so big, she was walking and talking now.

"Grandpa!"

She squealed happily and wiggled away from Chase and Jack got out of the pool and she ran into his arms.

"Hi sweetie, how are you?"

"Good"

She had on a red, white, and blue dress, with a red, white, and blue head band and little black shoes. Jacks heart melted, he loved little kids.

"Well you look gorges today."

"You too."

She laughed and grabbed his hand, dragging him over to Chase and Kim.

"Hi dad"

She kissed him and Chase pulled him in for a hug.

"Long time no see dad."

"Yeah, you guys coming in, its nice."

He nodded towards the large pool.

"Can I come in with you grandpa?"

He looked down at Angelina.

"Sure"

He took her hand and led her to the pool. Marissa, the girl he met, gasped.

"Oh she is so sweet."

"Angelina, this is Marissa and Amanda, and you know..."

Before he could finish Angelina already had pulled her dress over her head, now wearing a new flag bathing suit.

"Uncle Tony!"

She jumped to him and Tony grabbed her, hugging her.

"Hi angel."

"I can swim now."

Tony let her go and watched as she doggy paddle around the pool.

"See?"

"Very good, I am so proud of you."

Tony looked up at Jack and smiled, Audrey was sneaking up behind him.

"You swim better then your old grandpa over there."

Jack blushed and suddenly two hands were on his hips.

"Now who is this hottie in the trunks?"

Jack turned and saw Audrey standing there, his heart fluttering at the sight of her.
She kissed his lips gently and she held him close, pulling his body against hers.

"How are you handsome?"

"I'm great, how are you?"

"Wonderful, what do you think of my new dress?"

She spun around and he smiled.

"I have seen better."

She gasped and Tony and Jack laughed.

"Oh really?"

She shoved him back into the pool and stepped out of her dress, now in her bathing suit as well. She jumped in and put her hands on Jacks shoulders, wrapping her legs around his waist.

"Look better now?"

Jack smiled and kissed her.

"Much"

Jack looked over to where Tony way, he was gone.

"Where did Tony-"

To late, Tony cannon balled in right next to Jack.

Tony came up laughing.

"Sorry about that, didn't see you there."

Jack rolled his eyes and saw Michelle standing there.

"Hey"

"How have you been Jack?"

"I'm good"

She climbed in the pool and gave Jack a hug and turned to Audrey.

"Long time no see Audrey."

"I missed you!"

They hugged and started chatting. Jack and Tony sat on the side of the pool, only noticing Marissa and Amanda staring at them now.

"Thanks boys"

They got out, angry. Tony looked at Jack and smiled.

"Whoops, should have told them that we had girlfriends."

"I guess they cared."

Chase came back into the yard.

"Firework time folks!"

They all got out of the pool, Audrey held Angelina and Jacks hand and Michelle walked with her arm around Tony, heading for the front yard, passing Chappelle on the way..

"No fireworks Bauer, I like my house."

Jack smiled.

"Sure thing Ryan."

The firework show started and Jack realized, having a good time every once in a while, really could be great.

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PostPosted: Nov 23, 2007 7:53 pm Reply with quote Back to top

I will read it tomorrow i promise Wink

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PostPosted: Dec 08, 2007 1:46 am Reply with quote Back to top

I really hope you pasted that from another file! Or did you just sit here and go for it?

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PostPosted: Dec 11, 2007 10:01 pm Reply with quote Back to top

lol! I write TONS of fanfics on my forum, I sit there and go for it the first time I write it over there, then I just copy and paste it from there and spread them trough out the web, why was it that bad? lol

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PostPosted: Dec 11, 2007 10:10 pm Reply with quote Back to top

No! It wasn't bad at all! I just was just wondering if you decided to go for it and type like   a maniac for a forum! I hope you paste it to a word document in case this thread is ever lost.

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PostPosted: Dec 12, 2007 6:24 pm Reply with quote Back to top

yes I do lol, I have a whole folder of my writing, I would love to share them with u guys but a lot of them, are NC-17:) lol..idk how ur forum feels about that so...

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PostPosted: Feb 08, 2008 1:20 pm Reply with quote Back to top

Awww not Michelle, still, Chappelle makes the best parties ever, i mean, his parties have Jack Bauer and Tony Almedia, who wants moar? Razz

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PostPosted: Feb 24, 2008 2:21 pm Reply with quote Back to top

lol, thanks for the review

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